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Posted: 2015-10-14T01:51:56+10:00 In:

An insecure prison doctor cooks up misfortune for inmates when she discovers a desire to care for burn victims.

An insecure prison doctor cooks up misfortune for inmates when she discovers a desire to care for burn victims.
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    1. Singularity

      The doctor will need at least one redeeming characteristic because other wise she is a nasty person with no clear motivation other wise give her a noble reason perhaps she is experimenting to find a miracle burns treatment.

      Hope this helps.

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    2. Logliner

      This sounds like an intresting concept and you have a good main character, but to make it a better logline it needs three things:

      1. An inciting incident: what happens that makes her discover that desire? Whats gets the story starting?
      2. A clear goal for the main character.
      3. A main action: what must the doctor do to reach her goal?

      Hope it helped! 🙂

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