An obnoxious hummingbird and her time-traveling hijinks must learn that her misdeed to others have cataclysmic consequences.
Alan SmitheePenpusher
An obnoxious hummingbird and her time-traveling hijinks must learn that her misdeed to others have cataclysmic consequences.
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Loglines are about the action in the here and now, in the present tense of the story — not the lesson to be learned… sometime… eventually. Why? Because the struggle stretching out 90-110 minutes is what sells tickets, not the lesson finally learned in a few seconds of insight and recognition in the 90th minute.
The ongoing action line, not the momentary lesson beat, is what movie producers want to see in a logline.
And what does the bird want anyway? What is her specific objective goal that generates the hijinks? What is her specific character flaw (in a word or short phrase) that leads to its misdeeds?
fwiw
You are far better off using a Butterfly as the lead than a hummingbird.
When an unassuming Butterfly learns that even her slightest actions may cause overwhelming world catastrophes, She goes out of her way to not change a single thing in her environment, not even a blade of grass.
Title: The Butterfly Effect