As for being a janitor, burger flipper or ditch digger..those jobs are for the other people to do. At the age of 28, Charlie Bean comes to the harsh realization that he just might be the other people.
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As for being a janitor, burger flipper or ditch digger..those jobs are for the other people to do. At the age of 28, Charlie Bean comes to the harsh realization that he just might be the other people.
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Apart from a missing Goal (lack of establishing “what becomes his main action” in the story…) it works fine. So, something like —
???After losing all his investments at his 30th birthday, a man born with a silver spoon must do odd jobs to provide for his high maintenance family???
Good Luck DackVigilante!!
As variable said.
What is the inciting incident that created his realization?
As a result of that, what is his objective goal — what does he decide to do it?
What/who stands in the way?
What are the stakes?
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How about something like:
After failing another job interview, a proud man must put his ego aside and take any job he can to show his pregnant wife he can provide for his family before the birth of his child.