The Uncles – Love is Love
On the eve of their 50th wedding anniversary dinner, Uncles Mark and Robert, help their family come to terms with alcoholism, an issue threatening to destroy a beloved nephew.
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This logline leaves far too many questions as opposed to giving us an idea of the story.
– Who is ‘the family?’ Do you mean ‘a family? or even the Mafia?!!
– What is the 50 year anniversary of their favourite uncles? I dont understand what that means. Is it a same sex wedding anniversary between two uncles?
– What kind of issues are we talking about? Homophobia?
I genuinely have no idea what this is about so I apologise if I am way off base here.
Fair enough – things for me to think about.
Thank you
No problem, I’ve learnt from this site that literally every single word counts. Update the logline and resubmit it and I’m sure you will get plenty of good advice.
Done and done 🙂
It would be interesting to know what the issues are so that we get an idea of the subject matter, the stakes, the theme? You also say ‘some’ not all, so who are the some?
Hmmm….incudung all that, wouldn’t that make it more of a synopsis than a logline?
On the eve of their 50th wedding anniversary dinner, Uncles Mark and Robert, help their family come to terms with alcoholism, an issue threatening to destroy a beloved nephew.
Something like this perhaps?
Uncles… 50th anniversary? Whose 50th anniversary? Are these ‘uncles’ a gay couple? If so, it’s okay to say so. (The U.S. Supreme Court has spoken.) If not, please clarify.
Really? It’s not implied that the uncles are the ones celebrating and that they being two men are in fact a Gay couple? Is it necessary to point out such an obvious detail?
As long as you keep the word count 25-35 words, including these extra bits of info helps clarify the story details. It wont be a synopsis. It needs to imply what happens in the beginning, middle and end (but no spoilers).
Who is the main character? Is it the nephew or one of the uncles? The best loglines tend to have one main character who drive the plot.
Excellent! Thank you for your help and advise
Still confused. “On the eve of their 50th wedding anniversary dinner” refers to who?
And who is the protagonist?
Okay…..
Is this more of what you are wanting to see/read?
On the eve of his gay uncle?s anniversary dinner, Marcus must again battle with alcohol and the impact it continues to have on the family; all the while celebrating enduring love.
Hi Mark, in loglines we usually omit character names:
On the eve of his gay uncle?s anniversary dinner, a troubled man must again battle with alcohol and the impact it continues to have on the family; all the while celebrating enduring love.
my two cents for you