10 Days in Paradise
Carol Wilson, entangled with a vicious loan shark, forced to smuggle drugs out of South America to pay off her debt with the support of her boyfriend who accompanies her.
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I meant “stakes, not “conflict”, obviously…
I always advise against using the character’s name in the logline, unless they are famous. Seems to be missing an “is” (“…is forced…”). It lacks conflict (what happens if she fails?), and the “boyfriend” part is irrelevant for the logline (although I can only surmise that he’s really the person behind the drug operation, but that’s just a guess on my part).
Needs work…
Geno Scala (sharkeatingman)- judge