Penpusher
Posted: 2019-03-14T05:06:29+10:00 In:

Jesus Christ returns to earth with a sword, living under an alias, he does battle with the Devil to save his daughter’s soul.

Jesus Christ returns to earth with a sword, living under an alias, he does battle with the Devil to save his daughter’s soul.
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    1. Singularity

      Possible title – Second Coming (this was the title of a UK TV show that had a very similar premise)

      Check out the “Our formula” tab to help with formatting. Currently, there is no goal. What is Jesus trying to achieve? The fighting back is the action he’s taking in order to make this goal happen.?”Fight back against an unjust society” – what does this look like on screen?

      Why does he live under an alias? Surely, the best way for him to make a difference is to publicly announce this – think of the conflict and the chaos that would ensue. Living under an alias just makes him like any other guy trying to make a difference. Can he perform miracles? Is the story about him trying to remain anonymous?

      The inciting incident needs to tie in more heavily to the goal. They are a question and an answer. The goal of doing something must be in response to the inciting incident. If he is trying to correct the unjust society then the inciting incident is his first taste of how unjust it really is.

      How does Jesus return? Is he born or does he inhabit the body of another person?

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    2. Uberwriter

      Jesus while on earth decides to fight an unjust society but …… forcing him to.

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    3. Penpusher

      The greatest story of all. . . Christ?s return. . . not sure you are going for an irreverent, comedic take, or a quasi-biblical story that would draw (some) evangelicals. . .? I like to get some idea of the film?s tone when I read a longline.? Thanks for posting!

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    4. Logliner

      Contact me, caleb.danielt@gmail.com?I believe we can work together as I’ve had a similar story in the making. But here’s my take – it can either be quite comedic, or serious.

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      “When Jesus of Nazareth returns to Earth, completely unrecognizable, he recruits his elect from our modern new world to follow him into Tel Megiddo to finally untangle mankind from an AI-led and dependent “new world”.

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