Cocky and reckless, Test Pilot Hal Jordan?s job was not to be afraid, but when he is chosen to become an intergalactic Guardian and wear a ring that summons physical constructs from his will alone, He finds himself more afraid than ever as he faces a terrifying foe that devours worlds and feeds off fear itself.

This is almost a good logline and if anything, we need to know MORE: who is the terrifying foe? What does ‘devour worlds’ mean? Is it literal?

The logline needs to give us enough information so we can understand the fear.

A good logline is NOT a teaser. It gives us ALL the important story elements, so the reader is convinced there is sufficient material for a good story and subsequently requests the script.

You may want to do some reshuffling, to trim and make the grammer work better. Leave out that his “job was not to be afraid”. We can figure this out for ourselves. No need to mention the name, either.

Start with: “When a cocky and reckless test pilot is chosen to guard the galaxy using a magical ring, he must …”, then follows the exact nature of the battle and the enemy.

Rather than “He finds himself more afraid than ever” perhaps you can say something along the lines of “he learns about fear”. Play around with it until it sounds sexy.

Have fun loglining!