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Posted: December 17, 20202020-12-17T02:48:04+10:00 2020-12-17T02:48:04+10:00In: Comedy

Convinced by prominent comedians that marriage will make him funnier, a struggling comic takes their joke seriously and elopes only to find his bride wants a marriage so peaceful that in order to find the comedy in it, he’ll have to up his game.

Convinced by prominent comedians that marriage will make him funnier, a struggling comic takes their joke seriously and elopes only to find his bride wants a marriage so peaceful that in order to find the comedy in it, he’ll have to up his game.
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    1. Odie Samurai
      2020-12-17T04:03:25+10:00Added an answer on December 17, 2020 at 4:03 am

      Cool, the fun for me was in the naive journey to be funnier.
      Went with that, make this yours. You could up the ante by having him believe he has to marry a rival comedian for the magic to work 😉
      “When being told marriage will make him funnier, a naive comedian has 90 days to find a bride before the San Francisco Comedy Competition”

      Take care.

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        2020-12-17T04:48:59+10:00Replied to answer on December 17, 2020 at 4:48 am

        Thanks!

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    2. Richiev Singularity
      2020-12-17T18:47:02+10:00Added an answer on December 17, 2020 at 6:47 pm

      I like this concept, How about this?
      —–
      “Convinced that a bad marriage will make him funnier, a struggling comedian’s plans are foiled when the woman he marries for laughs becomes his perfect life partner.”
      —–
      “Looking for love in all the right places”

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    3. mlameks Penpusher
      2020-12-18T10:21:38+10:00Added an answer on December 18, 2020 at 10:21 am

      I think this one needs to make the protagonist more clear in a way that when the comedy comes from the character, what will be funny about it? A struggling comic in a peaceful marriage does not feel strong enough to me. He needs a marriage, let’s put that as the goal, and I liked Odie’s addition of bad marriage. So, where would comedy come from in a life of someone who needs a bad marriage to keep the stakes, that is a comedy contest (like Odie suggested), alive? Maybe something like, “a comedian with codependent tendencies, asks a colleague to be his ‘bad relationship’ to get some comedic ideas for a contest, but when he falls in love, things go sideways.”

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    4. Ckharper Samurai
      2020-12-19T14:42:14+10:00Added an answer on December 19, 2020 at 2:42 pm

      Picturing this I can only see the guy coming off as mean not funny if the wife is perfect. I think she needs to have her own goal/motivation a la How To Lose A Guy In 10 Days. I do see some comedy if he thinks he’s marrying like a complete train wreck in Vegas only for her to be the perfect housewife but again she needs some goal in this story that he doesn’t see coming,

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    5. CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter
      2020-12-20T11:54:56+10:00Added an answer on December 20, 2020 at 11:54 am

      There is a lot of setup, as others have pointed out. You have boiled the entire movie into a few words.

      He’ll have to up his game.

      As in? Become a complete bastard? Become the world’s best husband?

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