Title: HEARTHTALES. How to explain all that is going on in the few words of a logline when so much is going on? 🙂 It is a Horror Comedy with a love interest for writer, and two steampunk demon hunting women who are put on the trail of the demon by the hired conjurer voodoo (but non denominational mercenary) priest who works for a higher power. And we also see the three stories the three friends tell, which are all very different stories about family. So the writer’s situation is the frame wrapping the three tales.
During a rich Horror Writer's night away of drinking with two friends, each tells a story which is played out, while his greedy wife defectively conjures a demon to murder him. Meanwhile, two demon hunting steampunk women are on the demon's trail.
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Whenever the word “meanwhile” pops up in a logline, you KNOW there’s too much happening. It needs to be trimmed some, I believe. Execessive and non-essentials include: rich, “away of drinking with two friends, each tells a story which is played out”, “defectively” (is that the right word?), and much of the last sentence.
“During a horror writer’s party night, his greedy wife conjures up a demon to murder him.”
One of the things we have to remember is that, generally speaking, loglines are for high concept screenplays. Just sayin’… 🙂