Blue Day
Eyes opened to a blue sky, peeping in through the wholes of the make shift roof, he regained from a dreamless state, ready for the day, parched, quiet, cool and collected. First things first, to the copper water tumbler,still groggy he flt better as the metallic tasting water cooled his innards.
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This is not a logline. A logline is a one sentence “TV Guide blurb” that tells us what your story is about and hooks us into it.
was about to say the same thing
Someone took a left turn at Albuquerque :). This here website is called Logline It, not Prose It. Read this: https://loglines.org/howto/
This has to be the opening line of the first scene, accidentally cut and pasted instead of the logline.
That’s the only explanation I can offer…and still maintain my forum decorum…
First day my noble friends, still learning…..
Not a logline, but an opening to a novel. Give us the idea of your movie.