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Greek muse comes to earth to help struggling artist and retired musician open a roller disco – Xanadu

Greek muse comes to earth to help struggling artist and retired musician open a roller disco – Xanadu
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    1. Samurai

      I haven’t seen the movie, so I can give you 100% objective feedback to the logline!

      First of all, it’s not correct grammar. You must use articles: “A Greek muse … a struggling artist”.
      Also, there doesn’t seem to be any high stakes, or any particular reason WHY the muse would make the effort. In other words, the “WHY NOW” (or inciting incident) is not answered.

      Great stories have rich characters. What can you say about the muse? Is she neurotic? Why would she be an interesting character? And why can’t the artist and musician do the job themselves?

      The logline is currently very short, so I’m sure you have space to elaborate on some of these questions. Then, why not repost in the review space below!

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