Penpusher
Posted: 2015-08-07T03:34:28+10:00 In:

?Hands of Stone? Boxer turned attorney, Maxx Cohen, takes off the gloves fighting an uphill battle with ruthless federal prosecutors while bobbing and weaving his way through representing the New York Mafia.

STONE’S LAW

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    3 Reviews

    1. Singularity

      No need for the title of the script or the MC’s name in the logline.

      This seams like a situation not a plot.

      What does the MC specifically want and why now what was the event that made him need/want his goal? What motivates him?

      These elements need to be evident in the logline.

      Hope this helps.

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    2. Singularity

      What Nir Shelter said. And the main character is not exactly a sympathetic guy– he represents the bad guys. That’s not necessarily an immediate concept killer but it is a potential one. The character would need to be so compelling, so interesting that the audience will want to watch his “bobbing and weaving” in spite of his clientele.

      It’s better to frame the story with a specific case, a specific legal battle.

      And what’s at stake? So he loses in court. What is lost for the main character. It’s the bad guys who go to prison — not the lawyer. And he will collects his fat fees anyway, right? So what’s his jeopardy? What is there for the audience to worry about? What does he stand to lose if his clients lose in court?

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    3. Samurai

      Hold off on the cutesy boxing lingo in a logline; just make it clear what the story’s about.

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