Hapless new mother Audrey attempts to navigate the pressures and problems of motherhood. This is no easy task, especially with a selfish mother, a workaholic husband, and an oddball mothers group to contend with.
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Hapless new mother Audrey attempts to navigate the pressures and problems of motherhood. This is no easy task, especially with a selfish mother, a workaholic husband, and an oddball mothers group to contend with.
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An irk of mine in loglines – don’t use characters’ names. It’s a waste of word count and tells us nothing about character. Instead, use flaw and function. (Unless you’re pitching like, a Harry Potter sequel).
What is the event that kicks off this story that upsets the status quo? Is it just that she gives birth?
Is the series engine really just “a woman has a baby and life is difficult”?
Nicholas, what you’re written is a story idea. It is not a logline.
The above review offers some positive suggestions. Also I suggest you’ll benefit from some of Karel’s logline tutorials that are available, on YT.
What are the pressures and problems of motherhood the protagonist needs to overcome and why is this necessary.
The stakes that you need to state in the logline explain to readers what will be the outcome if she does or doesn’t succeed with achieving the goals.