Helped by her friends, a shy teenager finds success in an underground art world, but is left struggling when treatment for her mental illness strips her of both her best friend and her creativity.
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Helped by her friends, a shy teenager finds success in an underground art world, but is left struggling when treatment for her mental illness strips her of both her best friend and her creativity.
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You should give the lead character a pro-active goal”
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“When her treatment for mental illness strips her of her creativity, a shy artist searches for a holistic cure, against the recommendation of her doctor and the adamant disapproval of her best friend .”
Agree with Richiev. ?As currently framed, the logline seems to doom her to failure. ?It ends on a down beat:”… is left struggling when treatment for her mental illness…”
The logline needs to be framed in terms of her objective goal. ?Which is to recover, resume her artistic dream in spite of her mental disorder.
What is her mental problem anyway? ?Schizophrenia? ?Bipolar disorder? ?I think the logline should be specific on that point, not vague. ?A movie producer reading the logline will want to know what the particular personal demon she is wrestling with before they decide to read the script.