Penpusher
Posted: 2016-05-25T20:08:46+10:00 In:

In a drought plagued future, a world weary scientist discovers water, unleashing an ancient evil that threatens the lives of her small community

In a drought plagued future, a world weary scientist discovers water, unleashing an ancient evil that threatens the lives of her small community
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    1. Singularity

      As the others have said. ? The logline sets up a situation, but not a plot. ?What is the ancient evil and what is the threat it poses — the ultimate stakes for the community? ?And what is the objective goal that arises from the threat it poses? ?What must the scientist do about what he has unwittingly unleashed?

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    2. Singularity

      Agreed with the above comments, the lack of detail make the plot hard to picture.

      To help you can take a look at the training tab up on the top bar for more information on logline construction.

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    3. Uberwriter

      An interesting concept. What is this ancient evil? What is the MC’s goal? Why does her discovering water unleash this ancient evil? This version is too vague.

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