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kpetrakis01Logliner
In order to progress through heaven’s gates,? ghosts must pay penance by returning to earth and helping the people they hurt.
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An interesting idea for a plot.? Now it needs to be fleshed it out with the essential ingredients for a plot:? A singular protagonist who has X amount of time to complete a specific act of restorative justice or else. And the act he must perform must not only be the last thing he wants to do but also the hardest, one where the odds are against him.
I guess a ghost protagonist is basically unsocial or Withdrawn,? i.e.? detached from others and retreated inside oneself. Ghost are aloof – they don’t like people much, let alone helping them. Might the character arch be that of learning to “love” or recognise the value of others? Such that the person being helped are a kind of antagonist (and victim !) – in the sense that they prevent a withdrawn character type from achieving what they want most – avoiding people.
There doesn’t seem to be enough there to interest me… it’s too generic and doesn’t seem like too much of a challenge, especially for a ghost who probably can’t be harmed.? The “facing people who might not like you” thing doesn’t seem enough.? I’d try to make that seem more imposing of a goal.? Like maybe helping the widows of the people he murdered.? Still probably not getting into heaven after that though…
“Stuck in limbo, the spirit of a cold blooded hitman must save the daughter of his latest victim from the mafia boss who hired him, in order to rest in peace.”
Or:
“Stuck in limbo, the spirit of a cold-blooded hitman must save a girl from the mafia boss who hired him to kill her father, in order to rest in peace.”
I wanted to make “people they hurt” more specific and what can hurt more than murder? (Maybe lots of things, but murder will do just fine.)
I was actually thinking more family-like? /tween level. Like bullies going back to help the kids of the people they bullied? by going back to high school. The idea was to empathetic by being forcing them to be like the victim. I left it generic because I was thinking different people and different ‘cases’ for a TV series, not a movie.? But was definitely thinking younger audience, light dramedy with meaning.? So can look at different specific exampales and that should help create the tone.
What you have here is world-building.
You don’t have a lead character, your lead character doesn’t have a specific goal, and what is standing in the way of the lead character’s goal?