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The Sting
(1973)
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In the depths of the depression, a small time con artist teams up with a seasoned pro to con $500,000 from a ruthless mobster to avenge the mobster’s murder of his mentor.
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A great example, I’d make the wording a bit more “active sounding”.
For example:
After a ruthless mobster kills his mentor, a small-time con artist takes revenge by teaming up with a seasoned pro to get half a million out of the murderer.
One of my absolute favourite classics.
The ‘formula version’ would be something like:
“When his mentor is murdered by a ruthless mobster in the depths of the depression, a small time con artist must take revenge by teaming up with a seasoned pro to con $500,000 from the mobster.”
Only thing I am not sure of is what is the inciting incident is (Death of partner, offer to rob)
Like Karel mentioned, I think putting the death up top provides motivation
Also why does the pro want in? If a pro I imagine doing well. If the pro was ‘washed up’ or this was a chance at redemption as well?
The pro is seasoned but in a slump. And the man killed by the mobster was a beloved friend of the pro.
Nir:
I believe it is more effective for the logline to specifically indicate the method for getting revenge, to wit, pull off a long con. As if there was another option given the characters’ profession. But still.
I wasn’t sure who the mentor had the relationship with but it seems to have been clarified. It looks like something I’d enjoy seeing
This story has a lot of possibilities. It could be a comedy like “The Sting” or a thriller like “The Godfather.” A lot will depend on the character of the con artist.