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In the near future when an upgraded police droid becomes able to think and feel, it must learn to survive in a violent world where everyone wants to exploit its humanoid consciousness.
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Watched this film and all we have to say is that it is a FAVE!!!
GREAT logline for it, dpg… We should talk on the phone! Lol
While the concept was interesting, I thought the execution — to wit, the plot — fell short and was rather messy. It was not easy distilling a logline from the film.
You could lighten things up on the front end,
“In the near future, when ?police droid…”
or even shorten to
“When a police droid…”
Does it matter that it’s the “near” future? If it’s a police droid we know it’s in the future already.
Also ?with the phrase “becomes sentient”, ?you could cut down on the word count.
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Agree: “becomes sentient” ?is ?more concise.
>>Does it matter that it?s the ?near? future? If it?s a police droid we know it?s in the future already.
Good point. ?So:
When a police droid is upgraded and becomes sentient, it must learn to survive in a violent world where everyone wants to exploit its humanoid consciousness.
(26 words versus 32 in the 1st version)