Interwined stories between an Russian immigrant, a brother and sister dealing with their abusive father, a drug dealer and a pimp in four tales of sex, drugs and murder in Brighton Beach, Brooklyn.

“Russian immigrant” = protagonist

“sex, drugs and murder” = inciting incident

“Brighton Beach, Brooklyn.” = story setting

“a brother and sister, a drug dealer and a pimp ” = Villain?

For me, the challenge of this logline is the vagueness of the word ‘Intertwined’ … Who is doing what to whom?

A Russian in Brooklyn is the strength of this logline, setting up a kind’a cold war conflict – if this was the intention. The logline implies family immigration, but fails to state gender of protagonist. Guessing it is a male immigrant, maybe?

Drug dealing and pimping implies criminal activity, but in what way. Who has sold drugs to whom, did the Russian smuggle drugs?

As you can sense, this logline creates more questions, than answers. Mystery might make good marketing, but clarity is what makes for strong story proposals.