JC a 10-year-old boy genius in Outback Australia overcomes life’s endless hardships and grows into a man solving his community’s problems using his great intellect. In the process, he becomes the towns, Wet and Dry Goods Merchant, Pharmacist, Dentist, Optometrist, Mayor, Honorary Anesthesiologist, and romances his Childhood sweetheart along the way.
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JC a 10-year-old boy genius in Outback Australia overcomes life’s endless hardships and grows into a man solving his community’s problems using his great intellect. In the process, he becomes the towns, Wet and Dry Goods Merchant, Pharmacist, Dentist, Optometrist, Mayor, Honorary Anesthesiologist, and romances his Childhood sweetheart along the way.
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Agreed with DPG and Foxtrot25.
Even true stories need to be adapted for the screen, in other words, you’ll need to take liberties with the ‘facts’ and change them to best fit a script.
Is there one thing that he did that stood out from the rest? Or one thing he did that he is best known for? If not, is there something you can make up as a seminal achievement?
On a side note, dyslexia is NOT a flaw. Most dyslexia is a result of a different brain structure to the norm, it’s not something the main character can overcome or control but learn to work within his or her life. I should know as I was diagnosed with Dyslexia and have been struggling with it for years, yet at the same time, my brain’s unique information processing has given me some advantages.
A profoundly Dyslexic boy growing up in 1880?s outback Queensland, uses his ageless wisdom to beat his wealthy bullying rivals at their own game, becoming the town luminary in the process.
History unfold through the perspective of a 10 year old? genius in Outback Australia when he grows to become the towns Pharmacist, Dentist, Optometrist, Mayor and more but the real challenge is childhood sweetheart who’s not not easily impressed.
>>>He has dyslexia which I will mention.
Which, however, does not seem to stop him from being a “wonder boy”.? In drama (whether played for laughs or tears) the purpose of a character flaw is to raise suspense, put in doubt, serious doubt, that he can succeed.? That his flaw or vulnerability will be his downfall,
Also, in addition to being too long, the logline reads like “a string of pearls” story.? That is, a story where a series of events are linked together like pearls on a string with no singular pearl that stands out as the overarching objective goal.? Nor any sense of conflict and tension building to crisis and climax.
What is his overarching objective goal, anyway?? And who opposes him?? Who is his nemesis?
As Foxtrot25 said.? At 51 words, the entry is too long to be evaluated as a logline.
And comedies are about human foibles, not human perfection.? ?Therefore, there’s got to be a flaw in the mix,? a downside to being a “wonder boy”.
Holiday,
Not sure where to even start with this. Sounds like Doogie Houser on steroids.
Definitely read more about loglines and story building. What you wrote is more like a summary and even then what theme/message does your story convey? You need to think of one for this wonder boy.