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TheophilusPorter
Posted: December 11, 20122012-12-11T11:10:02+10:00 2012-12-11T11:10:02+10:00In: Public

Not finding any success in the self help and fitness books, a guy goes into a magical store and is given a remedy that works but comes with challenges and side effects that he wasn?t prepared to confront.

90 Days to Handsome

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    1. [Deleted User]
      2012-12-11T11:47:50+10:00Added an answer on December 11, 2012 at 11:47 am

      I have no idea what the “guy” is trying to be successful at. What sends him to the “magical store”? And I think we kind of need to know what side effects he will need to deal with, because that sounds like “the hook” (what makes the audience want to see this movie?) to me.

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    2. TheophilusPorter
      2012-12-11T12:03:43+10:00Added an answer on December 11, 2012 at 12:03 pm

      Thanks for the tip. Let me rewrite this one based on your feedback.

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    3. Kriss Tolliday
      2012-12-11T19:33:18+10:00Added an answer on December 11, 2012 at 7:33 pm

      Yeah think we need to know what some of the issues he will be facing. Also his motives for using the magic store other than being overweight. Has a woman turned him down due to it causing him to try lose the weight? DO the side effects effect relationships or him internally? I can see connections to The Nutty Professor. He was taunted so devised a potion and the side effects were ‘Buddy Love’. Perhaps use an example from The Nutty Professor to help you structure it.

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