On a normal day, a couple from university arrive in the NY city with same plan for one weekend, but a series of unexpected events happens to them after which their relationship, dreams and views on what they want change throughout a rainy day in a big city.
SofiaPenpusher
On a normal day, a couple from university arrive in the NY city with same plan for one weekend, but a series of unexpected events happens to them after which their relationship, dreams and views on what they want change throughout a rainy day in a big city.
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Hey Sofia! Try something like this:
College sweethearts arrive NYC to _______ (You mentioned that they had the same plan for the weekend. For this blank, tell us specifically what they have planned), but ________ happens (You mentioned a series of unfortunate events. In this blank, tell us what unfortunate events occur or at least the initial one that causes everything else to go awry), putting their dream, and ultimately their relationship to the test.
For example:
Two college sweethearts arrive in NYC intent on throwing the most epic college bash of their generation, but things go awry after a partygoer overdoes, drawing the attention of law enforcement.
Needs more specificity, a specific conflict, a specific objective goal. concrete stakes worth the audience’s time (and money) worrying about.