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aliribbonPenpusher
Posted: May 11, 20172017-05-11T13:15:25+10:00 2017-05-11T13:15:25+10:00In: Crime

On returning to work from maternity leave, a journalist discovers her children?s carer is the daughter of a woman controversially convicted of murder in the last trial she covered.

On returning to work from maternity leave, a journalist discovers her children?s carer is the daughter of a woman controversially convicted of murder in the last trial she covered.
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    1. dpg Singularity
      2017-05-11T15:32:26+10:00Added an answer on May 11, 2017 at 3:32 pm

      So what’s the dramatic problem, the jeopardy, the danger, the source of dramatic tension and suspense? ?Just because her mother is a convicted murderer doesn’t make her daughter a dangerous person — or does it?

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    2. Foxtrot25 Uberwriter
      2017-05-12T00:37:15+10:00Added an answer on May 12, 2017 at 12:37 am

      As dpg says… then what? Where’s the rest of the logline? Check the formula Karel has been so careful to craft and try to drop your story points into it.

      Also, provide the fine folks that offer their help on this site more information about your story so that help can be rendered.

      Good luck.

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    3. Richiev Singularity
      2017-05-12T09:46:40+10:00Added an answer on May 12, 2017 at 9:46 am

      You can drop the part about returning to work after maternity leave. The story begins when she hires the new babysitter.

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