Realizing his company is in danger of losing unpopularity, due to competition with his arch nemesis. A young successful fashion marketer contracts a plan to steal one of his high ranked female supermodels in order to boost his sales, only to grow unexpected feelings that could lead him into losing his business as a whole.
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Realizing his company is in danger of losing unpopularity, due to competition with his arch nemesis. A young successful fashion marketer contracts a plan to steal one of his high ranked female supermodels in order to boost his sales, only to grow unexpected feelings that could lead him into losing his business as a whole.
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I am confused by the term, ‘losing unpopularity’
If you lose unpopularity, that would make you popular, I would think popularity would be a good thing, so I can only assume you mean something else.
Also, you should write a little more decisively?for the purpose of the logline
Instead of: Realizing his company is in danger of losing unpopularity
This: When his company loses popularity
Losing popularity is far more compelling than the possibility of losing popularity.
5 words can replace your first 9 for economy:
To save his failing company, a young fashion marketer exploits a supermodel that he ultimately falls in love with and must decide between the future of his company and their happiness together.
Somewhat shorter.