Revision: When a timid, undocumented student gets abducted, she must find the courage to escape a bleak island with four other strangers who aren’t all who they seem.
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Revision: When a timid, undocumented student gets abducted, she must find the courage to escape a bleak island with four other strangers who aren’t all who they seem.
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dpg is right,
If your answer to “…was she abducted because she was undocumented?…” Is NO, then drop it from the logline
Other than that, it should not contain “she must find the courage to…” even if you describe her as “timid” Your goal MUST be front and center
Candersomn:
First of all, I think the struggles of undocumented students in the USA (aka: DACA), heck, the struggle of undocumented immigrants period, is a fecund? source of? drama.
But I just don’t see how her predicament is a dramatic correlation to her? legal status.? Or to flip it around, I don’t? see how her legal status is? a causal factor in her abduction.? Women are abducted all the time (alas) for reasons that have nothing to do with their legal status.? ?Why was she abducted because she was undocumented?? To what purpose?? What is the objective goal of the antagonists, her abductors?? What do they intend to do with her?? And are the 4 strangers also undocumented?