Almost killed, a young black Caribbean girl wants to attend college so she trades her ghetto neighborhood to live in a pristine suburb in America.
Almost killed in the concrete jungle that raised her, a young black Caribbean girl sees college as a way out, so she moves to suburbia America as an illegal immigrant.
1. Almost killed by whom?
(and if she moves somewhere else it becomes her history which has no place in your logline)
2. “To want to attend college” isn’t a goal
3. Her trading ghetto life is an event,
But with no implied conflict
Now her “moving to America as an illegal immigrant” is an interesting situation…
Personally i liked the direction we were headed in your previous thread.
Especially Richiev’s take..
When she moves with her stepdad in California, a spirited Caribbean runaway uses her homespun common sense and street-smarts to overcome the prejudice and stereotype she receives from an unwelcoming neighborhood.
A journey to fit in…
This format has scope in endless directions
Remember Tokyo Drift? It’s the only film I was interested–plotwise–in the FNF franchise