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Posted: March 17, 20192019-03-17T22:06:43+10:00 2019-03-17T22:06:43+10:00In: Drama

Short film. Many years after the war, a mother who was raped during the war lives by herself and has a young son that serves the army. While her son is on his way to surprise his mother, the father (rapist) shows up at the mother’s house to meet the son. While the mother tries to make him go away, the fight intensifies and the mother cuts the man. He goes crazy and tries to assault her, at that moment the son shows up and shoots his father.

Short film. Many years after the war, a mother who was raped during the war lives by herself and has a young son that serves the army. While her son is on his way to surprise his mother, the father (rapist) shows up at the mother’s house to meet the son. While the mother tries to make him go away, the fight intensifies and the mother cuts the man. He goes crazy and tries to assault her, at that moment the son shows up and shoots his father.
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    1. variable Uberwriter
      2019-03-17T23:27:29+10:00Added an answer on March 17, 2019 at 11:27 pm

      I like the outline; there’s enough conflict for a short film ..whose story is it? Depends on the Inciting Incident. Is it about the son who must (action) shoot a man to (goal) protect his mother?, or is it about the mother who must (action) stand against her rapist to (goal) redeem her dignity? Personally, It seems to say more if you go with the mother. Choose one.

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