Susan visits her new therapist and talks about events that have happened to her family. Meanwhile, the devil is gathering her ladies of fate to prepare to take over the world.

We don’t need names in a logline. It adds no value. It’s better to tell us something about Susan instead. Imagine you had a maximum of 3 words to tell somebody as much about yourself as possible. Would you waste one on your name?

What has Susan visited her therapist got to do with the devil taking over the world?? There is no connection and there very much needs to be.

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