Singularity
Posted: 2016-10-20T10:23:03+10:00 In:

Three cops, bitter rivals, fight each other and a corrupt system to unravel a conspiracy to take over organized crime in 1950’s L.A.

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    1. Singularity

      I agree with you, Nir Shelter, that “late night” can go. ?However, I prefer ?”fight each other and a corrupt system” ?because Bud White and Edmund Exley characters literally fight each other (twice). ? And I think that’s an important part of the story hook. ?Cops are always fighting corruption in films (within the department and society at large), but how are they also fighting — literally — each other? ?So:

      After a bloody massacre, three feuding cops fight each other and a corrupt system to unravel a conspiracy to take over organized crime in 1950?s L.A.
      (26 words )

      And btw:? their feuding, their inability to even peacefully co-exist as rivals,? is their character flaw.? Only after they stop fighting each other and partner up to fight the bad guys can they defeat the conspiracy.

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      “…Almost the ?entirety of the 1st Act focuses on the bitter rivalry among the 3 principals and corruption within the police department…”

      That’s fine, some stories require a lengthy setup before the plot kicks in. In this case, I believe they made the right choice as it’s the character dynamics, and the differences between their respective modus operandis, that add a layer of interest to the story. I prefer your second version (you’re on to me) I’m a sucker for a good inciting incident…

      I’d drop the late night description as what’s important is the fact that there was a massacre, streamline the MC’s descriptions and not mention they’ll fight each other – it’s obvious they will if they’re bitter rivals.

      E.g:
      After a bloody massacre, three bitter rival cops fight a corrupt system to unravel a conspiracy to take over organized crime in 1950?s L.A.

      And at 24 words, it’s one word under par…

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      Or, for those who clamor upon an inciting incident:

      After a bloody late night massacre, three cops, bitter rivals, fight each other and a corrupt system to unravel a conspiracy to take over organized crime in 1950?s L.A.
      (29 words)

      However, I would point out that the massacre at the Night Owl coffee shop ?occurs about 30 minutes into the film; it kicks off?the 2nd Act of the film. ?Almost the ?entirety of the 1st Act focuses on the bitter rivalry among the 3 principals and corruption within the police department.

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