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Posted: 2019-03-30T09:15:36+10:00 In:

TITLE: A Psycho In The Cockpit. LOGLINE: A psycho in the cockpit. STORY IS ABOUT: A Psycho in the cockpit.

TITLE: A Psycho In The Cockpit. LOGLINE: A psycho in the cockpit. STORY IS ABOUT: A Psycho in the cockpit.
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    1. Singularity

      Who is the lead character?
      What do they want?
      What is standing in their way?

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    2. Singularity

      You say you ‘Need NOT’ mention the other characters, but that’s not a logline. For instance, a blurb (In space no one can hear you scream) is not a logline.? Saying the film is ‘Godzilla’ meets ‘Terms of endearment’ is not a logline.
      It might be a pitch. When you are in a meeting and you say, Snakes on a plane meets Psycho, that might go over well in the meeting.

      But for a logline you should at least tell us who the lead character is.
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      “When a psycho takes? control of the plane and kills the pilot, a gamer and a flight attendant must wrest control of the controls before the madman crashes the Seven thirty-seven into the white house.”

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    3. Uberwriter

      Hello Steve
      It’s a catchy premise. Why don’t you take a shot at loglining it with the Protagonist, his Goal & the Inciting Incident?
      I believe it provides structural clarity to the writer, and a great learning experience to its readers.

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    4. Logliner

      The psycho points a handgun against the pilot?s head. The co-pilot is dead! Fasten your seatbelts, put your trays and seatbacks into an upright position, and enjoy your fright!

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    5. Singularity

      This isn’t a logline. There’s an interesting premise but the reader needs to understand the story! Loglines are read by producers to determine whether a story is worth pursuing and in order to do that they must get a feel for the movie as a whole – protagonist, antagonist, goal, stakes, etc, etc. It’s not designed to encourage an audience to see it. By veering away from the recommended guidelines (and they are just guidelines) you run the risk of the reader simply discarding it as it’s not a logline. Why risk it for the sake of a little time coming up with a decent logline? Your concept is strong enough for a logline to be pretty straightforward (as Richiev has demonstrated) and still provide the interest and thirst for more whilst actually conforming to the format that a reader expects. You will not get necessarily get the chance to explain anything to the reader other than what’s in the logline – they won’t understand that it’s a single location, they won’t get that it’s a “snakes on a plane” type thing because they might not even read the title.

      Why is this different to every other film where there’s a guy who hijacks a plane? Is this a commercial flight? Or a tiny 2 seater? Is the pilot the psycho? Has the plane left the tarmac? Why do we care? Your logline is where you have the opportunity to show off your hook… don’t waste it.

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    6. Logliner

      That’s not a logline, it’s a TAGLINE, but a good one! 🙂

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