Penpusher
Posted: 2020-08-13T14:31:45+10:00 In:

After a raid by a corrupt government leaves his partner dead, a desperate man uses gang controlled technology to escape his dystopian world to an alternate reality in a bid to replace a version of himself living an idealistic life.

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    4 Reviews

    1. Singularity

      Is there an inciting incident to this story? Just curious.

      “When (This happens) a desperate man uses underground technology to transport himself to an alternate reality in order to secretly switch places with a spoiled and privileged version of himself.”

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    2. Samurai

      Hi Knightrider1984,

      After a raid by a corrupt government leaves his partner dead, a desperate man uses gang controlled technology to escape his dystopian world to an alternate reality in a bid to replace a version of himself living an idealistic life.

      This is a mouthful. We need to keep things simple. There’s a lot of ideas here that are quite interesting though. However – I don’t think they quite gel.

      INTENTION: must escape from corrupt government agents?
      OBSTACLE: ???

      Attempt 1:
      In order to catch a serial killer, a cop tries out an experimental new technology where he escapes to an alternate reality where he lives a perfect fantasy life, but soon finds himself becoming addicted and losing his grip on reality.

      (I’m hoping this suggests the serial killer is still on the loose and this guy’s real life and lives of loved ones hang in the balance because he’s too busy with his new toy.)

      INTENTION: catch killer.
      OBSTACLE: addiction to this new toy.
      STAKES: people are dying and loved ones in danger as he tries to get rid of addiction and discern what’s real and what isn’t.

      Hope whatever I’ve written gets the ball rolling.

      Anyways – it’s a very, very interesting concept.

      Good luck!

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