How Far Are You Willing To Go.
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Trapped in a simulated loop of Earth’s final year before war ravaged the world, a increasingly pessimistic time traveller-to-be must test an increasingly severe sequence of events before going back in time to save the planet for real.
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Having travelled to the future and seen the end of humanity, a misanthropic scientist has one year to change events that lead to world war 3.
misanthropic seem to be a better and shorter description than increasingly pessimistic.
the fact he is in simulated loop is just an artefact of the plot, so I left it out of the Logline.
The original Logline lead me to more questions:
is he really trapped in the simulation?
if it is the loop what is the time constraint?
what and who is the antagonist?
>>>back in time
Back how far?
Trapped in a simulated loop of Earth?s final year, a scientist must relive an increasingly strange sequence of events before trying to change history.
get rid of the words “to be” they break the flow
Why must HE care? how does it personally matters to him?
Why NOW? It seems to lack an Inciting Incident
Also, if it’s a loop, then the clock isn’t ticking right?
because If they fail to train themselves (i am guessing) “the final year” will start again..