Twenty something Sherlock Holmes and Jame Moriarty hatch a plan to start a war and profit, only to be undone by a secret government agency headed by Mycroft Holmes.
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Twenty something Sherlock Holmes and Jame Moriarty hatch a plan to start a war and profit, only to be undone by a secret government agency headed by Mycroft Holmes.
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1892 Mycroft Holmes heads a mission to stop a plan to undermine England position in Afghanistan not knowing the villains are a young Sherlock and Moriarty.
Agree with Nir Shelter. ?I can only see this as marketable if framed as a redemption narrative; how a young Sherlock starts off on the wrong track, abuses his powers of observation and deduction, finally gets on the right track, on the right side of the law.
Or as a sci-fi story of a Sherlock character played out in two parallel worlds, one in which he’s a good guy, the other in which he’s the opposite. ?Inevitably, the two characters’s lives must converge and collide over the same dramatic issue. ?Which one will survive?
Sherlock an evil mastermind criminal… If you’re using a pre-existing character you can’t change him in such a way – it’s no longer the same Character.
It reads as though you’re trying to structure an origin story for Sherlock Holmes, I strongly suggest (if you want producers to take this seriously) that you stick to the very well defined characteristics already in the canon. Take a leaf out of Steven Moffat’s book and expand or accentuate what has already been established instead of doing a complete 180 on the character.
Also, best to define a specific plot by which you demonstrate how Sherlock became Sherlock. So what specific event is the inciting incident that motivates him to achieve a specific goal?
I’d replace twenty something with “young” and not assume that every potential reader knows these characters already.
Who is the protagonist? Sherlock or Mycroft? Since Sherlock is evil, I assume Mycroft. Focus and mention his GSU in the log while still using Sherlock.
It is not a single event. They have a plan, there are numerous twists and turns.
In my world the young Holmes is evil. This story is the secret reason why he and Moriarty end up hating each other.
This looks like the end of the story:
..only to be undone by a secret government agency headed by Mycroft Holmes.
Does the end belong in the logline?
What is the inciting incident in your story? In the books Sherlock Holmes is not driven by money, a complaint Dr. Watson makes often, so starting a war in the hope making profits off it would seem out of character.