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LeviathanSamurai
Posted: October 25, 20182018-10-25T01:31:57+10:00 2018-10-25T01:31:57+10:00In: Action

Two cops must stop a drug cartel from unleashing his narcotic on the city before everyone becomes addicted.

Two cops must stop a drug cartel from unleashing his narcotic on the city before everyone becomes addicted.
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    1. CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter
      2018-10-25T06:15:16+10:00Added an answer on October 25, 2018 at 6:15 am

      When you have a story that is ?something do what it is supposed to do? you have to give it an angle.

      The two cops are working for a rival gang and are trying to stop this new cartel.

      It is a member of the cops family.

      You get it.

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    2. Richiev Singularity
      2018-10-25T07:40:29+10:00Added an answer on October 25, 2018 at 7:40 am

      Kinda sounds important enough to have the whole police force working on the case. Maybe even the DEA?? Are the DEA in the bad guys pocket? is the police force corrupt? Why just the two cops???

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    3. Mike Pedley Singularity
      2018-10-25T17:26:51+10:00Added an answer on October 25, 2018 at 5:26 pm

      I think suggesting that everyone?is going to get addicted is a bit of a stretch. It doesn’t matter how good the drug is. It’s good to have stakes but make sure they’re believable.

      The stakes and the goal are slightly disjointed in my mind. For everyone to become addicted the drugs need to be on the market already but the cops are trying to stop them getting to market. If the cops fail that doesn’t mean that everyone immediately gets addicted, it just means the drugs flood the market, word gets out about how good they are, and then everyone gets addicted. I think there’s a couple of steps missing that makes the stakes jar a little with me. Why is it so important that no one gets addicted? I get it… drugs are bad… but why are they SO bad.

      As Richiev pointed out, if this is so bad then surely the DEA or at least a few more members of the team would be on this case. The scales have to be balanced.

      Where’s the hook in this story? Currently, it’s just some cops doing their job. What’s going to make this story different from all the other cop films out there.

      Who are these cops? Give us a little more to go on. Where’s the conflict in their partnership? This is a MUST!

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    4. dpg Singularity
      2018-10-25T21:59:48+10:00Added an answer on October 25, 2018 at 9:59 pm

      I share the concerns of the others.? And the logline is grammatically flawed.? ?First impressions are everything in a logline.

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    5. Mandavirmais Logliner
      2018-10-26T03:48:58+10:00Added an answer on October 26, 2018 at 3:48 am

      …unleashing their narcotic…

      What kind of narcotic are we talking about and why will “everyone” use it and become addicted? Is it in the food? In the water?

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