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moviefreak81Samurai
Posted: October 29, 20172017-10-29T22:58:30+10:00 2017-10-29T22:58:30+10:00In: Examples

When a 12 year old girl becomes under protection of a hitmen, she must learn the tools of the trade to avenge her parents assassinated by gangsters.

Leon The Professional

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    1. dpg Singularity
      2018-03-27T12:46:11+10:00Added an answer on March 27, 2018 at 12:46 pm

      I’ve been mulling over this film recently and here’s my take:

      When gangsters kill her parents, a 12-year old girl finds protection and a mentor in a hit man who agrees to her demand to be taught how to get revenge.

      (30 words)

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    2. moviefreak81 Samurai
      2017-10-31T04:18:54+10:00Added an answer on October 31, 2017 at 4:18 am

      I thought that including the true(?) inciting incident would (murder of their parents) would make it clutter but your take doesn’t look that much cluttered… good work.

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    3. [Deleted User]
      2017-10-31T04:06:24+10:00Added an answer on October 31, 2017 at 4:06 am

      The killing and her coming under protection of Leon happen so close together in the film that they are almost within the same story beat, so that isn’t a huge issue. However, her coming under the protection of Leon doesn’t really relate to her plot-line as far, as this logline is concerned, because it raises questions like “why is she under his protection and not an uncle or orphanage?” so, maybe,? try something like:

      “When a 12 year old girl comes home to see her family murdered, she hides out in a friendly neighbours apartment only to discover that he is a lethal hitman and tries to convince him to train her so she can get her revenge.”

      It’s quite long and clunky but all the necessary beats are there. Hope this helps.

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    4. moviefreak81 Samurai
      2017-10-29T23:01:23+10:00Added an answer on October 29, 2017 at 11:01 pm

      It’s for the movie “Leon the professional”.

      At first, the inciting incident was the killing… but for the logline it seems like more logical her being under protection of Leon… what do you think?

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