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When a black teenager is murdered, two homicide detectives struggle to set aside their differences as racial tensions erupt in 1990’s New Orleans.

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      Uberwriter

      “When a black teenager is murdered, two homicide detectives struggle to set aside their differences as racial tensions erupt in 1990?s New Orleans.”

      It ?seems the logline isn’t complete. They must set aside their difference to….solve the case…and what do racial tensions have to do with them solving the case??

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      Singularity

      >>>and what do racial tensions have to do with them solving the case?

      In New Orleans, then, and now: everything .

      The logline appears to capitalize on ?the news hook of the current tension between cops and Blacks in too many American communities. ?However, the logline may need some polishing. ?Why must they ?put aside their differences — because one of them is Black?

      And ?they must put asides their differences ?to do what? ?What becomes their objective goal as a result of the murder? Solve the murder — find out who did it? ?Or is there a suspect and they just have to find him? ?And what specifically is the causal link between the murder and erupting racial tensions. ?I mean, I can guess. But I shouldn’t have to. ?Has the murder incited riots and looting?

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      Uberwriter

      In 1990’s New Orleans, an experienced, rule following black cop and an impulsive rookie must work together to bring the killer of a black teenager to justice before the riots it caused tear the city apart. (36)

      In 1990’s New Orleans, when the murder of ?black teenager causes riots,?an experienced black cop must work with an impulsive, stubborn rookie to find the killer before the city is torn apart. (33)

      The focus of the logline should be on the relationship that is front in center, the mixed gender buddy cop type relationship. I couldn’t think of a good word for ‘rule following’ at the moment, but in both versions I tried to highlight the differences which cause the obstacle to their work.
      Hope this helps.

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      Singularity

      The objective goal is to solve the murder. ?The strained relationship is a complicating factor; they must resolve that complication to achieve their objective goal.

      As originally written, the logline is a plot with co-protagonists who come with an array of ingredients for a spicy ?gumbo of a working relationship: ?white vs black, female versus male, ambitious rookie versus seasoned veteran. ?More ingredients, perhaps, than can be crammed into a concise logline.

      The question I ask myself is : which of the two has the stronger, longer character arc? ? Who has the most to overcome externally and grow internally to achieve the objective goal? ?Whoever it is, perhaps, ought to be the primary protagonist.

      I’m inclined to tag the veteran Black detective as a mentor character. He may not be perfect, but he is clearly more experienced and has acquired more street smarts. ?The female detective needs him more than he needs her. ?In fact, initially he probably would ?think he?doesn’t?needs her at all — doesn’t want her at all because she brings more liabilities than assets to the partnership.

      Her task, then, in terms of their relationship is to prove she’s a worthy partner as she pursues the objective goal. ?So I’m inclined to suggest refocusing the logline around the female detective.

      fwiw

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