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When a country singer is temporarily released from jail, he goes looking for his daughter who has returned all of his letters unopened.

When a country singer is temporarily released from jail, he goes looking for his daughter who has returned all of his letters unopened.
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    1. Singularity

      >>>?he goes looking for his daughter who has returned all of his letters unopened.

      Needs clarification. Are the letters returned because she’s disappeared?? Or have they been returned because she is alienated from him?? IOW:? ?Is this a story about a mystery where his objective goal is find out why she has disappeared.? Or his objective goal to reconcile and heal their relationship ?

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    2. Singularity

      The idea has interesting possibilities.? But it contains a misstatement that undermines the credibility of the premise.

      >>>temporarily released from jail

      A prisoner is either paroled early or released after serving? his full time. No one gets a “temporary release” just because they’re in show business.?That’s not how the criminal? injustice system works.? (Martha Stewart didn’t get released to continue taping her syndicated TV shows.? She had to serve her 5 months of hard time her crimes.)

      If a prisoner has been convicted or a? non-violent crime and if he is serving in a minimum security prison, he might — might — get a special, temporary release for an emergency, 48 hours,? to attend the funeral of a family member.? But having letters returned unopened doesn’t rise to the level of a crisis situation qualifying his being considered for a temporary release.?

      It’s a better — and simpler — setup that after doing his time or getting paroled, the protagonist goes in search of his daughter to answer the question of why all his letters to her have been returned unopened.

      fwiw

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