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When a dangerous spirit-god is summoned, a fearful college student must attempt to rescue his adventurous best friend whom the spirit-god has possessed.

When a dangerous spirit-god is summoned, a fearful college student must attempt to rescue his adventurous best friend whom the spirit-god has possessed.
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    1. Singularity

      Why was the spirit summoned? ?The summoning may have back-fired, had reverse or unintended consequences. ?Who summed the spirit (the flesh-and-blood antagonist? ?the victim?) ?for what original objective goal?

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    2. Singularity

      Too few details and too many vague descriptions in this logline.

      As DPG pointed out, what? Who? Why? Where.

      Regarding the?structure, you mention the inciting incident at the end: “…his adventurous best friend whom the spirit-god has possessed?”. Best to relocate your inciting incident to the start of the logline, so the reader can understand the premise and motivation when the first read the logline.

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