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TullyArcherSamurai
Posted: June 28, 20182018-06-28T01:31:02+10:00 2018-06-28T01:31:02+10:00In: Comedy

When a dedicated Cupid is forced to swap jobs with a despondent Genie, he must complete both assignments on his own to save their jobs and their immortality.

When a dedicated Cupid is forced to swap jobs with a despondent Genie, he must complete both assignments on his own to save their jobs and their immortality.
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    1. Mike Pedley Singularity
      2018-06-28T02:46:48+10:00Added an answer on June 28, 2018 at 2:46 am

      Who?s forcing them to swap? And why is not just the genie who loses his job and immortality? Could they be best friends and the Cupid offers to cover for the genie for a night that turns into a weekend? Friendship vs immortality kinda thing. Like the idea though.

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    2. dpg Singularity
      2018-06-28T03:37:39+10:00Added an answer on June 28, 2018 at 3:37 am

      I think the concept has potential.

      Why not? dual protagonists, a dual story thread story?? They swap because both are burned out in their traditional jobs.? Cupid has become cynical about the whole idea of romantic love and the Genie is fed up with granting stupid and selfish wishes?

      fwiw

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    3. Richiev Singularity
      2018-06-28T06:52:55+10:00Added an answer on June 28, 2018 at 6:52 am

      If the goal is for the lead to save his job (And immortality) Then you should begin by who is threatening his job. Does Cupid have a boss?

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    4. Richiev Singularity
      2018-06-28T06:59:57+10:00Added an answer on June 28, 2018 at 6:59 am

      You should change your first line, it’s confusing.

      If I have an apple and you have an orange and we swap, then I will have the orange and you will have the apple. I won’t end up with both the apple and the orange.

      You begin by saying they ‘swap’ jobs, but then say as a result of swapping cupid must do both. But that isn’t a result of swapping,

      I would clarify that line.

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    5. Mike Pedley Singularity
      2018-06-28T18:12:58+10:00Added an answer on June 28, 2018 at 6:12 pm

      When upper management force a dedicated cupid and a despondent genie to swap jobs for training purposes…

      Maybe update the inciting incident to include something about the corporation forcing them. This not only answers the question of who but immediately provides a lot of information about the world in which the film is set.

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    6. Neer Shelter Singularity
      2018-06-28T19:26:59+10:00Added an answer on June 28, 2018 at 7:26 pm

      The premise is confusing and it lacks conflict.

      What’s stopping the cupid from doing his job or the Genie’s?

      As for the despondent Genie, so what if the Genie isn’t working as hard? Why is the Cupid motivated to do both jobs? If they’ve been forced into a job swap by management and the Genie ain’t pulling his weight, then it won’t impact the Cupid. It’s the Genie that will cop the flack from the boss, or the Cupid can just complain.

      Otherwise, the job of a Genie (according to legend) is to stay trapped in a lamp and once freed grant wishes.
      How is he going to do both jobs if he’s trapped in a lamp? Unless this is a different kind of Genie, or in other words, not a Genie.

      I just don’t see a story here.

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    7. Nettle Samurai
      2018-06-28T21:23:15+10:00Added an answer on June 28, 2018 at 9:23 pm

      I think you must specify the jobs of the characters rather than the character. Stating Genie and Cupid swapping jobs does not make clear what their job is. You just need to add ‘assignment of ….. (E.g, granting a set of 7 dragon balls and making Vegeta love Bulma. Haha) Specifying the jobs will make your dramatic premise and inciting incident clear.

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