Title: shutter speed
So a psychopathic cameraman is killing innocent homeless people and documenting them under “mysterious serial killings”
When he learns that she knows his secret (around midpoint??) let’s just say he’s willing to do anything for his bright future…
My question is: what are they doing in the first half of Act II? What do you suggest happens in pages 25 to 55 for a 110 page script? Do they flirt each other before she discovers (while editing) that he’s a sonofab**ch
It doesn’t create a sense of urgency and danger. She’s working night shift with a psychopathic killer which isn’t expressed by her simple goal “to safely evacuate the studio”
thanks for your time
I am assuming she looks at the wrong footage.
I think this story works, especially if you give a good reason why the building is on lockdown and there are no security?personnel?around
Here is an attempt, I am not sure it is a final logline but hopefully it is a step in the right direction:
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“When she discovers her cameraman is a murderer, a career editor working overnight must find a way to escape or be the star in the psychopaths latest snuff film.”
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I think you have an intriguing story idea.? I suggest you expand the setting and time frame.? That is, make her a studio producer who becomes suspicious after time and again he’s the one who gets the scoop, who’s always the first on the scene.???”Nightcrawler” meets “American Psycho”.
fwiw