When a grandson running from a media scandal ends up joining a commune, he is encouraged to visit his hometown and claim what’s his, to his surprise, an inheritance left by his adopted grandparents. But when he finds himself fighting off TV reporters who follow him to his new commune, he realizes that by publicly accepting a family secret, he can thwart them off indefinitely and claim leadership of a new commune he builds with his windfall.
Roberto AltoLogliner
When a grandson running from a media scandal ends up joining a commune, he is encouraged to visit his hometown and claim what’s his, to his surprise, an inheritance left by his adopted grandparents. But when he finds himself fighting off TV reporters who follow him to his new commune, he realizes that by publicly accepting a family secret, he can thwart them off indefinitely and claim leadership of a new commune he builds with his windfall.
Share
At 77 words, this is a summary, not a logline. ?And a rather convoluted one. ?And most of it seems to belong in the backstory. ? Simplify, simplify, simplify. ?Not easy to do, ?I grant you, but absolutely necessary in a logline.
In no more than 12 words: ?what does the protagonist want to do? ?What is his objective goal?
In no more than 12 words, what is the inciting incident that triggers his pursuit of that goal?
In no more than 12 words, who/what opposes him?
What DPG wrote.
Loglines are meant to be simple and easy to understand. Check out the ‘Formula’ tab for more information about logline conventions.