When a jaded business woman tries to sell her eye-sore car to an optimistic college student, they find a time capsule of forgotten items from her youth. Bonding over discovered similar interests, they desperately try to grapple the generational gap, nostalgia and envy of each other’s lives. Ultimately, the woman is forced to either go through with the sale and let go of the past, or hold onto the car which encapsulates it.
Alan SmitheePenpusher
When a jaded business woman tries to sell her eye-sore car to an optimistic college student, they find a time capsule of forgotten items from her youth. Bonding over discovered similar interests, they desperately try to grapple the generational gap, nostalgia and envy of each other’s lives. Ultimately, the woman is forced to either go through with the sale and let go of the past, or hold onto the car which encapsulates it.
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Why doesn’t she just take all her personal items out of the car before she sells it? If she did that, what would be left? Seat covers? Bumper stickers? Floor mats?
For me a generation gap is 20-25 years. If the woman bought the car in her youth, then it would be at least that old as well.
Unless the woman must sell the car because she needs the money and the college student must buy that car and no other, there is no drama around the sale itself.
If this is a love story and the car is just the vehicle? (couldn’t resist the pun) for the relationship to develop, then the 25 word logline should concentrate on the generational problems.
Is this for a short or a feature length film?
Agreed with yqwert, the stakes and drama don’t seem to hold up.
Is the dramatic question whether the woman will sell the car or not?
If so I suggest that the story be about the older woman, and her emotional entanglement with the car needs to be greater. What if the car belonged to her son or husband who died in a car crash?
Focus on the emotional journey and drop the detail.
Why is she triggered by discovering the items. Perhaps look at that.
You can see all the emotions in your mind put them on the page. (Not your story, just an example).
Disillusioned with life, a woman while getting her car ready to sell finds items that triggers her start a journey to rediscover herself and question her own life choices.