When a newly arrived Papuan girl falls for a spoilt young man with a fatal illness she convinces him to escape his fiancé and allow her Medicine man grandfather to heal him and have him accepted by her people.
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When a newly arrived Papuan girl falls for a spoilt young man with a fatal illness she convinces him to escape his fiancé and allow her Medicine man grandfather to heal him and have him accepted by her people.
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The logline puts the spotlight on the girl. Why? The guy owns the character arc, And he has by far more at risk, by far more at stake than she does.
He has the harder decision to make. He has to take the longest intellectual and emotional journey to arrive at the decision *HE* — not her — must make, the decision on which the plot pivots. He must to do a complete 180 degree flip, giving up modern medicine, putting his faith in “primitive” medicine.
He’s putting his life in the hands of a man he has never met to perform some kind of medical “hocus pocus” that he has no rational , empirical reason to trust.
*HIS* life is at stake — not hers.
So why does the logline put the spotlight on her when it seems it ought to be on him?
Big D here – aka “Dallas, Texas USA” when I hear “spoilt” I think of chunky milk 🙂 so I’ll take it this young man is wealthy.
I tried to stick to your core (from what I can glean from your OP) when constructing the logline. You can save the other obstacles e.g. arranged to be married, tribal politics, acceptance, and rejection as ingredients for your ACTs.
“A Papuan girl falls for a wealthy boy from a rival tribe, but when she discovers he’s terminally ill they embark on a quest to be healed by her medicine man grandfather”
I like the word spoilt but it is unusual and unknown to the American ear…