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Samuel Foy
Posted: August 7, 20132013-08-07T19:48:53+10:00 2013-08-07T19:48:53+10:00In: Student Loglines

When a Nigerian hooker working in Dubai escapes barely with her life after killing a man in self-defense, she makes a vow to wreak as much havoc as she can against the rich, corrupt and powerful in an all-out battle between the haves and have-nots.

The Desert Playground

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    1. JanCabal Logliner
      2013-08-11T22:15:51+10:00Added an answer on August 11, 2013 at 10:15 pm

      I miss some flaw of the protagonist. How much havoc can really a Nigerian hooker cause at Dubai, where women are so restricted in all aspects of public life? Perhaps she can be a luxury prostitute and therefore she has few contacts here and there? Making a vow is a good inciting incident, but there needs to be more, some hook. What are the stakes? Vow doesn’t give us any stakes. But murder of some high-profile man can set her tail on fire and she decides to run or fight back – or she will get killed!

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    2. Marcus Hyndes
      2013-08-08T09:08:37+10:00Added an answer on August 8, 2013 at 9:08 am

      Hey Sam I like your idea. it makes for a thrilling story. Maybe you could say as much with fewer words. Cheers.

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