When a passionate biker girl’s entry to participate in a Motorcycle trip was denied on basis of her gender : She refuses to put off this apparent set back- and holding firm to the credo, embarks on a most chaotic and hilarious journey of her life ,Solo monumental motorcycle odyssey from American West coast to East coast to create history in the “Motorcycle Hall of Fame”.
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When a passionate biker girl’s entry to participate in a Motorcycle trip was denied on basis of her gender : She refuses to put off this apparent set back- and holding firm to the credo, embarks on a most chaotic and hilarious journey of her life ,Solo monumental motorcycle odyssey from American West coast to East coast to create history in the “Motorcycle Hall of Fame”.
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Shiva,
You have 5 threads for this story. It’s more productive to keep it as one.
This version is way too long and convoluted. I fear you’re trying to make this story more meaty than it really is.
The last version said it better.
As Foxtrot25 said.? At 66 words in length too long and convoluted to evaluate as a logline.
I think there is the seed for an interesting America Odyssey story here with a female protagonist (for a change). So I want to — but I am not (yet) enticed — to ride along on this one.
My concern is the credibility of the inciting incident that kick starts the story.? While there remain bumps, grease slicks, ruts and speed traps of male chauvinism among bikers, I am not aware that the gender issue is generally an insurmountable obstacle to riding with a pack that it once was.? As any attendee or spectator at the Rolling Thunder and Sturgis rallies can attest. What is the time period for this story?