Far from Par 2 – The Revenge of Bally
Donn CurbowPenpusher
When a rejected talking golf ball loses his original owner, he teams up with his new friend to enact revenge.
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Revenge on whom? (Who is the antagonist?) And how?
Also, “already rejected” and original owner seem redundant. Did his original owner deliberately reject him– is he the villain?.
Revenge on whom? (Who is the antagonist?) And how?
Also, “already rejected” and original owner seem redundant. Did his original owner deliberately reject him– is he the villain?.
When a talking golf ball get’s rejected after a tournament loss, it doesn’t sit well as he teams up with his new friend to enact revenge against his former owner.
When a talking golf ball get’s rejected after a tournament loss, it doesn’t sit well as he teams up with his new friend to enact revenge against his former owner.
I assume “his friend” is a person (another golfer perhaps?), but it’s not completely clear from the logline – maybe it’s another golf ball, or a sadistic golf club?
The other thing that would help your logline is to add some stakes, and maybe a ticking clock.
Maybe something like this:
“When a talking golf ball get?s tossed away after a tournament loss, he teams up with a mischievous golf pro to win the big PGA tournament and exact revenge on his owner.”
Sounds fun, good luck with this.
I assume “his friend” is a person (another golfer perhaps?), but it’s not completely clear from the logline – maybe it’s another golf ball, or a sadistic golf club?
The other thing that would help your logline is to add some stakes, and maybe a ticking clock.
Maybe something like this:
“When a talking golf ball get?s tossed away after a tournament loss, he teams up with a mischievous golf pro to win the big PGA tournament and exact revenge on his owner.”
Sounds fun, good luck with this.
Far from Par
When a dysfunctional young native man with a history of being unable to assimilate into normal society needs help in winning a local golf tournament, he believes it comes from a talking golf ball.
It’s still current on Logline.it…under FORCED Assimilation
Far from Par 2
When a talking golf ball get?s rejected after a tournament loss, it doesn’t sit well as he teams up with his new friend to enact revenge against his former owner.
The roles actually reverse in part 2 when our hero want’s his life back away from golf and Bally become’s the villain mad at his success without him. However, this is how it’s played out but really the first movie is about Henry and the second is about Sara and their relationship with Bally. Sara get’s hit at the end of the first movie and then dumped by her snotty boyfriend who won the tournament. After turning down Henry, she tries to contact him more than once, but to no avail. Having lost both of them, Bally takes over and convinces her to act, against Henry. Bally will take Sara on an adventure in search of Henry to New Mexico where he’s relaxing with his friends. Will love prevail between Henry and Sara? We’ll see.
Far from Par
When a dysfunctional young native man with a history of being unable to assimilate into normal society needs help in winning a local golf tournament, he believes it comes from a talking golf ball.
It’s still current on Logline.it…under FORCED Assimilation
Far from Par 2
When a talking golf ball get?s rejected after a tournament loss, it doesn’t sit well as he teams up with his new friend to enact revenge against his former owner.
The roles actually reverse in part 2 when our hero want’s his life back away from golf and Bally become’s the villain mad at his success without him. However, this is how it’s played out but really the first movie is about Henry and the second is about Sara and their relationship with Bally. Sara get’s hit at the end of the first movie and then dumped by her snotty boyfriend who won the tournament. After turning down Henry, she tries to contact him more than once, but to no avail. Having lost both of them, Bally takes over and convinces her to act, against Henry. Bally will take Sara on an adventure in search of Henry to New Mexico where he’s relaxing with his friends. Will love prevail between Henry and Sara? We’ll see.
Josh..the snotty golfer shows up for another round of excitement also.
Josh..the snotty golfer shows up for another round of excitement also.
I just wanted to post that your idea on this was very good. My research on this showed me things that are very clear..money is tight. So I decided I wanted to stay away from the bigger picture..the ones that cost millions to make and involving the PGA or another golf course would certainly start to add up, but I wanted more of a down to earth movie in which those who don’t like golf would still understand it and have fun and laugh.
I perp. liked the mischievous golf pro..since I have golfed since birth…my movie actually depicts golf and some of those who teach/play as some who are ruining it. Over the years I think golf has lost some of its luster do to overpaying and just the way they act when they get beat. Just because you got money and get lessons everyday, doesn’t mean a person with more talent can’t beat you. If I had a dime for everyone of those I met…..
Just a note, thanks bud.
Curbs
I just wanted to post that your idea on this was very good. My research on this showed me things that are very clear..money is tight. So I decided I wanted to stay away from the bigger picture..the ones that cost millions to make and involving the PGA or another golf course would certainly start to add up, but I wanted more of a down to earth movie in which those who don’t like golf would still understand it and have fun and laugh.
I perp. liked the mischievous golf pro..since I have golfed since birth…my movie actually depicts golf and some of those who teach/play as some who are ruining it. Over the years I think golf has lost some of its luster do to overpaying and just the way they act when they get beat. Just because you got money and get lessons everyday, doesn’t mean a person with more talent can’t beat you. If I had a dime for everyone of those I met…..
Just a note, thanks bud.
Curbs
What is his new friend? Man? Golf ball?
Why does the talking golf ball want revenge? What happened that made them separate, and is it something the talking golf ball really needs to get revenge with?
After years of success, a talking golf ball is (unknowingly?) (replaced? rejected?) by his partner. Down on its luck, the ball seeks to return to the golf scene no matter the cost! <- This could make it interesting, cause if shows the determination of the ball, and how far it is willing to go. When it meets the "friend", it will make us question the intentions of the ball. Does the talking golf ball see this "friend" as friend or a means to an end. And is revenge its ultimate goal? or just the enjoyment of the game? Good path of discovery in this, not to mention making the golf ball seem more dimensional.
What is his new friend? Man? Golf ball?
Why does the talking golf ball want revenge? What happened that made them separate, and is it something the talking golf ball really needs to get revenge with?
After years of success, a talking golf ball is (unknowingly?) (replaced? rejected?) by his partner. Down on its luck, the ball seeks to return to the golf scene no matter the cost! <- This could make it interesting, cause if shows the determination of the ball, and how far it is willing to go. When it meets the "friend", it will make us question the intentions of the ball. Does the talking golf ball see this "friend" as friend or a means to an end. And is revenge its ultimate goal? or just the enjoyment of the game? Good path of discovery in this, not to mention making the golf ball seem more dimensional.
>>>. And is revenge its ultimate goal? or just the enjoyment of the game?
Good point. A talking golf ball as the MC is a tough concept to sell. What will help sell it is to accentuate the positive not the negative. Sell the character’s passion, sheer love for the game – not the urge for revenge.
>>>. And is revenge its ultimate goal? or just the enjoyment of the game?
Good point. A talking golf ball as the MC is a tough concept to sell. What will help sell it is to accentuate the positive not the negative. Sell the character’s passion, sheer love for the game – not the urge for revenge.
New friend is Sara..snotty kids ex girlfriend who get’s hit by Bally at the end. She’s rejected by Josh cause he’s now moving on..to something better, he won.
Henry discards Bally for failing to help him win. Bally’s beyond mad because he belonged to one of the rich kids before Josh use him to hit Henry in the head.
Henry realizes it’s all mental, in which now Sara..being hit..realizes her mental side with Bally..and they use each other to get revenge.
Love of the game..golf..no. All of my golf friends hated the ending to Tin Cup..cause that was a mental ending. In real life, that never happens, but Hollywood spins it to make it mental.
I don’t think it’s a tough sell..not as Danny DeVito as the voice. Both feed backs on it from down south we’re positive, but less golf and more interaction between the characters. And that’s what I’ve pushed for on both the movies. More mental..like real golf.
Thanks
Curbs
New friend is Sara..snotty kids ex girlfriend who get’s hit by Bally at the end. She’s rejected by Josh cause he’s now moving on..to something better, he won.
Henry discards Bally for failing to help him win. Bally’s beyond mad because he belonged to one of the rich kids before Josh use him to hit Henry in the head.
Henry realizes it’s all mental, in which now Sara..being hit..realizes her mental side with Bally..and they use each other to get revenge.
Love of the game..golf..no. All of my golf friends hated the ending to Tin Cup..cause that was a mental ending. In real life, that never happens, but Hollywood spins it to make it mental.
I don’t think it’s a tough sell..not as Danny DeVito as the voice. Both feed backs on it from down south we’re positive, but less golf and more interaction between the characters. And that’s what I’ve pushed for on both the movies. More mental..like real golf.
Thanks
Curbs