Logliner
Posted: 2020-08-12T05:28:28+10:00 In:

When a snake attack threatens his species with extinction, a sheltered kangaroo rat must embark on a perilous journey to unite his colony with another, 250 kilometers away.

Think Pixar-esque!

Inspired by Tiny Creatures on Netflix.

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    6 Reviews

    1. Singularity

      There’s something here for sure.

      I don’t think the snake attack can be said to threaten his species with extinction when there’s another colony 250km away. It can threaten his colony, but we already know there are others. How does the kangaroo rat know there’s another colony? Or is his quest to find others and he doesn’t know if there are any more? Either way, write it from his perspective.

      “A sheltered kangaroo rat must lead the desperate survivors on a perilous journey across the desert to find more of their kind after a vicious snake attack decimates the colony.”

      I can’t decide if it’s better for him to go alone and then cut back to the remains of the colony who are eagerly awaiting his return with reinforcements, or for him to have the responsibility of looking after everyone left. Go with the story you want to tell.

      Keep going with this.

      Hope this helps.

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    2. Singularity

      Agree with Mike Pedley.

      And how would a kangaroo rat know there is a “cousin” colony 250 k-i-l-o-m-e-t-e-r-s away?

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    3. Logliner

      both great pieces of feedback

      Maybe there’s an elder kangaroo rat in the colony who somehow came from the distant colony, but the others dismiss him as mad and say its impossible, but the hero believes him.

      I was thinking along the lines of bugs life, where he goes on his own, meets some allies and returns. (There’s a vegan eagle character in mind amongst others!)

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