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Posted: 2017-09-03T23:14:34+10:00 In:

When a star-struck young buck is forced to hide out in an off-grid commune to evade the police, using the identity he constructed to attain his anonymity allows him to win over the group, who decides to make him their new leader, even after he confesses to a past crime.

When a star-struck young buck is forced to hide out in an off-grid commune to evade the police, using the identity he constructed to attain his anonymity allows him to win over the group, who decides to make him their new leader, even after he confesses to a past crime.
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    1. Best Answer
      Singularity

      Agreed with DPG.

      Also, what does “…star-struck young buck…” mean?

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    2. Best Answer
      Uberwriter

      Also, we are way too long at this point as well. Shorten.

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    3. Best Answer
      Singularity

      And then what?

      What is the specific dramatic problem created by this sequence of events?

      As a result, what must he do about the problem? ?IOW: what becomes his objective goal?

      Who opposes him? ?Who is his nemesis?

      What I see is a chain of events. ?What I don’t see (yet) is a chain of causation that creates a plot.

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