A teenage girl discovers a unique robot algorithm that cures paralyses, but when it?s plagiarised by her mentor, the only way to prove the truth, is to compete against him at an International Robotics Competition, win a million dollars in sponsorship, and grant her dying mothers last wish.
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A teenage girl discovers a unique robot algorithm that cures paralyses, but when it?s plagiarised by her mentor, the only way to prove the truth, is to compete against him at an International Robotics Competition, win a million dollars in sponsorship, and grant her dying mothers last wish.
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Want is her want/need?
To fulfil her mum?s dying wish a xxx girl enters her robot in a competition coming up against her mentor who stole her technology.
To prove she is the inventor of world changing tech a girl enters her robot in an international competition against her mentor who stole the technology.
After her mentor steals technology she has developed a girl enters her robot in a competition to prove …. and expose her mentor.
The revised version is overloaded with too much baggage, too many goals.
Foxtro25’s rewrite is better.? Or focus on fulfilling her dying mother’s last wish.? In which case, you need specify what it is.
Fulfilling a mother’s dying wish is more likely to emotionally connect with an audience than winning a contest.
After a medical breakthrough that cures paralyses is stolen by her mentor, a brilliant teenage girl must win a competition to prove her claim.
Best I can do with so many elements.