When a troubled young man tries to kill himself, confined to the hospital he finds some peace by supporting cancer patients but faces being discharged and losing his newfound peace.

Having worked on a suicide hot line, I can see the dramatic potential.? But I think?the concept needs?fleshing out.

Prima facie, the? story seems?to set up a rather weak?dramatic problem.? For there is no lack of opportunities for the young man to volunteer of?supporting cancer patients once he’s released.? Either by hospital visits or by participating in?any number of out-patient group and individual support programs.

Or looking at it from another angle, the logline is?incomplete because it does not define?clearly defined objective goal for the young man.?? It presents?only a ?set up: in the hospital he discovers that supporting cancer patients is therapy for his suicidal impulses.? That’s a good start.

And then what??? Specifically, as a result of this realization, what does he?do when he’s released?? What becomes his objective goal?? How does he intend to continue his therapeutic strategy for combatting the emotions that drive him to suicide?? Who or what opposes or poses an obstacle to his goal?

>>>>Could there be something that happens with a cancer patient that brings a new twist to the story

A?great story?twist!? The cancer?patient, terminally? ill, asks the?young man with suicidal tendencies to help her her own life.